Shop Mobile More Submit  Join Login
If I tell you that I love you,
Will you say it back to me?
If I tell you that I love you,
Will you run away and scream?
If I tell you that I love you,
Will you think it's a nightmare?
If I tell you that I love you,
Will you think it's just a dare?
If I tell you that I love you,
Would you kiss me in the rain?
If I tell you that I love you,
Would you become a greater pain?
If I tell you that I love you,
Would you stop and kiss my hair?
If I tell you that I love you,
Will our hearts become a pair?
If I tell you that I love you,
Would you love me with all of your soul?
Or will it take me forever to realize
that you let me fall down on my own?
~Bloodlilly333 I'll tell him... Soon-ish... Hopefully. Otherwise I chicken out and wonder forever, or at least until summer.

To Everybody: I wrote this, please read and comment, enjoy!! :D :P


*NO STEALING OF ANY OF MY WORK!!!* You can just ask first at least
Add a Comment:
 
:iconblack-kat9:
BlacK-Kat9 Featured By Owner May 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
If I tell you that I love your poem,
Will you join my group? D:
Reply
:iconmylifeisaveragestill:
MyLifeisAverageStill Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
OH HECK YEAH.
Sorry this is embarrassingly late omg
Reply
:iconthefrozendream:
TheFrozenDream Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
wow - so true! Wonderful *w*
Reply
:iconmylifeisaveragestill:
MyLifeisAverageStill Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much! :D
Reply
:iconmandapanda134:
MandaPanda134 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011
GREAT!
Reply
:iconmylifeisaveragestill:
MyLifeisAverageStill Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!!! :)
Reply
:iconmandapanda134:
MandaPanda134 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011
Your Welcome!!
Reply
:iconmylifeisaveragestill:
MyLifeisAverageStill Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
And thanks for the watch :D
Reply
:iconmandapanda134:
MandaPanda134 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011
No problem
Reply
:iconmylifeisaveragestill:
MyLifeisAverageStill Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I love your lil' quote thingys..
Reply
:iconmandapanda134:
MandaPanda134 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011
Oh really? Those are only a few of the ones i have
Reply
:iconmylifeisaveragestill:
MyLifeisAverageStill Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
They're awesome
Reply
(1 Reply)
:icondarlingangel0565:
DarlingAngel0565 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2011  Professional Writer
I love it, and the last sentence really got to me; my eyes actually teared up by time I got to the end.
Amazingly written and showing of emotion. :blackrose:
Reply
:iconmylifeisaveragestill:
MyLifeisAverageStill Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Oh thank you so much! I actually almost cried when I wrote this and my other piece: I just wanted a hug. They were the ones that I really had a more personal relationship with.
Reply
:icondarlingangel0565:
DarlingAngel0565 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2011  Professional Writer
I can tell through your words that is all you wanted.
It came out so clearly, and you did a fantastic job of expressing that.
Since you didn't get your hug, I can offer you one now :huggle:. :heart:
Reply
:iconmylifeisaveragestill:
MyLifeisAverageStill Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Hey thanks! :tighthug: :cling:
Reply
:icondarlingangel0565:
DarlingAngel0565 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2011  Professional Writer
You are welcome, it is my pleasure to do this. :huggle: :heart:
Reply
:iconliezx3:
liezx3 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2011
wow! i love this cause it discrebes the way i feel right now, it really beautiful!
Reply
:iconmylifeisaveragestill:
MyLifeisAverageStill Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Awww ahaha thanks!
Reply
:iconliezx3:
liezx3 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2011
^_^
Reply
:iconalexislish:
AlexisLish Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Oh yeah........I've fallen before.
And yet I've been picked up again, by the one
The one who threw me down
The rain turned to shine
And from now on our smiles
And tales of friendship
overshadow the words I once uttered.
Reply
:iconravenwindracer:
Ravenwindracer Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011
Well, I can definitely relate to this. I like your use of repetition in this poem. :)
Reply
:iconmylifeisaveragestill:
MyLifeisAverageStill Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
haha thanks.
Reply
:iconravenwindracer:
Ravenwindracer Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011
No problem. :)
Reply
:iconthecriticofinnocence:
TheCriticofInnocence Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011  Student General Artist
Well... go for it! you won't know until you try.
I like the rhyme and quick rhythm of this poem... Perfect.
Reply
:iconmylifeisaveragestill:
MyLifeisAverageStill Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. And I will go for it. As soon as I... y'know, figure out HOW.
Reply
:iconthecriticofinnocence:
TheCriticofInnocence Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011  Student General Artist
good luck, then...
Reply
:icontchaikovsky4th:
tchaikovsky4th Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011   Writer
I was gonna add this to my favorites and then I realized it was already in my favorites XD
Reply
:iconmylifeisaveragestill:
MyLifeisAverageStill Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
haha lol
Reply
:iconthelulustarz:
TheLulustarz Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011
If he's a true person, he'll understand and at least try to stand with you.
Reply
:iconmylifeisaveragestill:
MyLifeisAverageStill Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah.. maybe.. I dunno.
Reply
:iconthelulustarz:
TheLulustarz Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011
Guys can be ass holes. Just kinda let him know softly.
Reply
:iconmylifeisaveragestill:
MyLifeisAverageStill Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
How do I let someone know that I really truly love them and there the best thing ever "softly"? haha not in those words for sure.. But how?
Reply
:iconthelulustarz:
TheLulustarz Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011
Make him smile and laugh, and when he does, look into his eyes and say "You know I love you... right?" Tada ^_^

I've done it allot :b they replie "Yeah haha" I say "No... I mean... I really really really like you..." Tada, the rest is up to him.
Reply
:iconmylifeisaveragestill:
MyLifeisAverageStill Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
When you did that "really really really like you" part what did they say/do?
Reply
:iconthelulustarz:
TheLulustarz Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011
Some times they just look down and think about it. After some time (a day or two, once it took the next dance) they'll do one of two things.
1, "I like you to, as a friend"
Or 2, "I.... I like you to..."
If they do 2, that means they REALLY like you.
Reply
:iconmylifeisaveragestill:
MyLifeisAverageStill Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Argh! See? SO MANY WAYS IT COULD GO WRONG!!!! *voice in head* "or it could go right" I feel like I have two sides: a practical one and a risky one. Both sides dont usually agree but now they are! Telling me to go for it. But some small really really miniscule part is resisting. and that part is so strong.
Reply
(1 Reply)
:iconnejitenrenamy:
nejitenrenamy Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011
Awesome Poem!
Reply
:iconmylifeisaveragestill:
MyLifeisAverageStill Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU
Reply
:iconnejitenrenamy:
nejitenrenamy Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011
^^
Reply
:iconjunkie4janet:
Junkie4Janet Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2011
Me likey :)
Reply
:iconmylifeisaveragestill:
MyLifeisAverageStill Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Me likey your comment. Thanks!
Reply
:iconjunkie4janet:
Junkie4Janet Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2011
Lol You're welcome! :D
Reply
:icontchaikovsky4th:
tchaikovsky4th Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2011   Writer
aww :) *reading comments* :icontchaikovsky4th: ~tchaikovsky4th
Reply
:iconmylifeisaveragestill:
MyLifeisAverageStill Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Haha thanks
Reply
:icondaalmago:
Daalmago Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2011
the way that you put all those scenarios of this question is amazing plus it is so emotional and raw that you have to love it
Reply
:iconmylifeisaveragestill:
MyLifeisAverageStill Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. That means a lot to me. One of my friends told me that it seems like everytime I write a poem, they're so deeply interconnected with me, that its like she gets to see a different, deeper part so your comment was great! xD
Reply
:icondaalmago:
Daalmago Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2011
you are welcome, i am still amazed poem and i think your friend forgot to say that you are pretty good at making people relate to your job, you are awesome
Reply
:iconmylifeisaveragestill:
MyLifeisAverageStill Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. :iconblushplz: :iconawwplz:
Reply
:iconblackraven721:
Blackraven721 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2011
I can REALLY REALLY REALLY identify with this... :(
Reply
Add a Comment:
 
×

:iconmylifeisaveragestill: More from MyLifeisAverageStill


Featured in Collections

literature by tamarazeegers


More from DeviantArt



Details

Submitted on
April 8, 2011
File Size
860 bytes
Link
Thumb

Stats

Views
1,454
Favourites
78 (who?)
Comments
89
×